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评阅老师大海拙评:
问好诗友!
承句“怆神”可酌!题目是“思乡”,结句怎么是“他乡”反倒比“故乡”亲呢?意思拧巴了!
一家之言,不妥之处,请见谅!
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评阅老师逍遥简评:问好老师,第一法无误,但是整首缺乏新意,转结不够出彩。加油哈!
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