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首先问好滢滢,上比“占”字所指不明,鸟也可占枝头,可换一个字“绽”如何?
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问好同学,意境很好,思路不错,只雨和余稍谐音,冢绿思黛玉葬花,我也想用来着哈哈,没想好词。学习了
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首先问好关雎组师兄,
4.4.7三分句马蹄律正格长联。整联布局立意棒哒哒!只下联尾句当春歉意费解。也许是我理解不够。妄论了
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