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古风学院绝句三期考槃组第九讲复习课作业贴 |
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问好求真兄!诗格律正确,符合渔洋第九法,二、四句“日”重字,诗读来流畅,若题目换成秋思或秋夜感怀更扣题,有缘个见,海涵!
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夜幕里看得见深蓝,好像有点不恰当
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转合不错,起句前四后三意重,可炼,承句有点暮春的感觉,建议再酌。
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