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莲花好。冷色的出句,孤,感觉不妥,换个动词侵啊啥的,你自己考虑。第一个对句,书对高,词性不对。别的都不错,有说错的我们再讨论。
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1:填空:飞字不好
2出句:相思怎么滴尽呢?
3:教心是啥?和后三也不搭
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