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问好一抹微云!问答题回答仔细正确!七绝题目是枫。可是起句和承句虽是写秋天却跟枫没什么关联,转句才看到写枫,这样起承与转句有断裂
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问好我梦亦空空!问答题回答仔细正确。七绝,起承转合尚可。一点不足,起句“”莫道秋来万木悲“”,你想用拟人手法很不错。可是木是不会悲的
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