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叶子好!紫依互评作业!出句四七联很好,意境表达确切!
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红外线点评:出句融情入句很好,基本是情景交融。对句前四风翻旧事尚可,后三清容与烛泪不切,
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淡月同学好:我是天国使者 乱弹开始,来问落花君何处,拟人手法好,寂寞孤独的情绪淋漓尽致,
雨打秋窗惊烛泪
风掀帘幕问谁痴
递进,流转的很...
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