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问好诗友,诗歌平仄无误,首句借用邻韵可行,主题和意象选择很棒,讽刺味足。转句“倒是”和结句略口语化。
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问好诗友。诗歌平仄用韵无误,情感闲适,意象选择大体不错。结句逻辑略有跳跃,不知道云鹤的意象是否在讲茶沫?
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