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评;合律。曰景。立意明确,承接自然,词语流畅,脉络清晰,抒发有致。赞。春雨竹老师点评
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描情摹景,已得诗法
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有点,现代用语,不宜入诗
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结句未能做到移情入景,
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前三句挺好,结句不应该直白的点题
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结句表意不明,且与前三句无多大瓜葛
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起承两句调换一下更好
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