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沧浪诗词学院二期绝句班竹组第二讲作业 |
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问好同学,此诗格律无误,起承写景,转结抒情,结构转好。只是题材老旧,无甚新意。建议多关注时势民生为好。
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起句此处和满园意重,承句前思后三断痕,尾句彩锦和绣红妆没有关联,整首诗不知道立意是什么,妄评勿怪
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