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沧浪诗词学院二期绝句班兰组第二讲作业 |
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问好同学!绝句用韵正确。第四句意思模糊。焉换成因,更好
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这首七绝是平起首句入韵式,符合作业要求。平仄格律正确,韵正确。入声字还有:角、塞、北
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问好诗友!诗写得自然流畅,情景立意都很好,有诗魂。转句的“无”字是否定词,入声字也正确。“身”和“尘”字是同韵部的字,一首诗中应避免
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